网友：doli530 打分：0 [2008-12-06 03:46:33]

“To Jason:
　　Happy birthday! Today is your fourteenth birthday. This book is your birthday present. I think you will like this story. This story is about "a" girl’s life in "a" plastic castle "where" there are many interesting characters which "will" give readers lots of fun"作者回复：
太感谢了。
不过最后一句的"a" girl’s life in "a" plastic castle "where" there are many interesting characters which "will" give readers lots of fun"
后面一段没有问题，不过我认为前面应该用“a plastic castle which has many interesting characeters.”会更好。不过后文也有“which”，所以说改成“a plastic castle which has many interesting characeters who give readers lots of fun.”会更好一点。
一些拙见，望多交流-_,-

   

 
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